The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one are of Britian. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distribiuted.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one are of Britian. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distribiuted.
The given table and pie charts demonstrate data on the police
budget
, and how the
budget
was spent on different areas
such
as salaries, technology or buildings and transportation in 2017 and 2018.
Overall
, the most important income of the
budget
provided
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was provided
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by
National
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the National
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Government, and the lowest proportion was coming from other sources like grants for each
years
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.
Therefore
, the
budget
was spent on mostly salaries, and only small percentages were placed
for
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technological investments in 2017 and 2018. It is true that
police
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budget
was mostly supplied by National Government in 2017 as 175.5
million
, which was slightly increased by 2.3
million
. The second important source for the
budget
was local taxes which were improved
nearly
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10% during a year
of
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period
,
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and reached 102.3
million
in 2018.
Although
other sources only took small
contribution
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, these
were
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increased
a
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half
million
after
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a year later. Eventually, the total
budget
improved more than 10
million
,
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and raised approximately 318
million
in 2018. In 2017 a quarter of the
budget
was spent on salaries which was the highest investment area,
however
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it reduced by 6% over a year. The expenses of basic infrastructures
such
as buildings and transportation were protected its place each
years
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year
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, but the investment
of
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in
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technology was improved to 14% in 2018.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
Vocabulary: Replace the words budget, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "improved" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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