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With the advancement of technology,more and more people are able to work from home. This brings lots of benefits to workers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The advent of technology can not be ignored, as nowadays it
enable
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people
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 to be
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connected
 with others in
real
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time
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, and as
result
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a result
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 a lot of
infrustructures
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infrastructures
infrastructure
 and companies give
the
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employees the
opportunite
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opportunity
 to
work
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remote
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remotely
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. Today
i
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 will expose my opinion and in advance a can
cleary
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clearly
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 say that I agree that
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 brings lots of benefits.
First,
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the internet is the most
revolution
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ivention
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invention
inventions
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everday
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everyday
 provide
is
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us
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 with a range of
aplications
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applications
 in order to
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 our daily life
easily
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, and,
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result
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 individuals started to use it as
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work
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 instrument, in
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 priceless
work
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 tool
permit
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people
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be
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 in
comunication
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communication
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real
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time
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. So, the employers have reached the conclusion
that is
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 not necessary to be
physical
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 present in order to do the job,
speciall
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especially
 on the period that the government prohibited the circulation of
people
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 with the purpose to reduce the cases of Covid-19. During
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 period a lot of
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institutions
 realized that
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work
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 in
distance
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 can
also
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 be effective and
produtive
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productive
 and more than that
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 costly.
In addition
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,
during
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 a long
of
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time
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people
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refusee
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refuse
refused
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jobs
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of jobs
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due to
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 the fact that the place
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 far away from their residence, and sometimes
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 meant that they need to search for a
pleace
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place
 near
of
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work
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 to rent or spent a lot of money with the transportation, which is in the major of the cases not feasible , because
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 means extra expenses and probably the salary will not cover. Meanwhile, with the
possibilite
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possibility
 to
work
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 from home
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 kind of
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drawbacks
drawback
 are
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ultra-passed
, and the employer and the employee are in
position
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a position
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 of win-win. The employees
starts
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 to have more control of their
lifes
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lives
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 and
time
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,
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 and is already proved that
their
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there
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 become more
effeciente
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efficient
 and available
to
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news
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new
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 tasks, and in another hand, the
employes
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employees
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 reduce de costs with
a
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apply
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work space
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workspace
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 and have more incomes because the
people
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 that
work
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 in their companies are more
produtive
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productive
. In
conlusion
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conclusion
, I agree that
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work
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working
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 from home offers several benefits and opportunities and we must treat
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apply
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technology as an ally and not as an enemy.

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