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The use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction among many people in society. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

#media #interaction #people #society
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Real time
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 interactions among
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 are being replaced by virtual ones through social media .
people
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 have mixed
opinion
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 regarding
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 new issue,
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 discuss
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 perspective in subsequent paragraphs. The individuals who are likely attracted towards
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the face
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face to face
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 interaction
argues
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 that it is convenient and
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 for someone to interact .
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it allows one to communicate
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 another from any corner of the globe and
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 the comfort of their home.
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 should be considered a great merit of social media, allowing interaction without
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 presence 
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 side, the other part of the argument says that many
people
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 think that it is leading toward weakening of social bonds among
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 and youngsters are now isolating themselves from the surrounding and Cutting
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 their interactions which are the basis of our human societies which is socialising with its community members, which many feel could have a devastating impact on our collective social groups and communities.  So I conclude it to the fact that even though the level of convenience it provides should be appreciated but at the cost of deteriorating the aspect of
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 race makes it an unfair deal.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • face-to-face interaction
  • geographical barriers
  • global community
  • cultural diversity
  • economic opportunities
  • superficial interactions
  • mental health impact
  • loneliness
  • depression
  • interpersonal relationships
  • real world
  • spread of misinformation
  • echo chambers
  • societal polarization
  • informed citizenship
  • constant connectivity
  • maintain relationships
  • fast and efficient
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