Some people say free time activities for children should be organized by parents. Others say that children should be free to choose what they do in their free time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Leisure
time
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activities
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are imperative for
children
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. There is one school of thought that perceive
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should have
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freedom to choose what they do in
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their leisure
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time
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.
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others think that
parents
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should be in
control
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for
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that matter. In my
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there should be a guardian to
control
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or monitor
kids
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regarding these
activities
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.   Raising
kids
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is not an easy task when it comes to parenting.
Parents
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are usually very concerned about their
children
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's daily
activities
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.
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instance
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in free
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if a parent has provided
child
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the child
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with a mobile phone or tablet to play games and there is no check and balance on how long a child is going to use can eventually harm the
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Similarly
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there is an age group of
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who uses
internet
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in
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their leisure
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time
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without
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of any guardian can be very harmful as there is
lot
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of violent and vulgar content available on
internet
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.   On the
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if
parents
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organize the daily activity
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time table
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timetable
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it can assure the kid is under
control
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, and not going in any wrong direction and involved in any
such
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activity that could be harmful. Take the example of a parent who has imposed outdoor
activities
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on
kids
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can have
very
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positive impact on
overall
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health.
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in
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this
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age young people do not like to be driven regarding their
activities
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specially
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in
free
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their free
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time
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but doing so keeps the
kids
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under their
control
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.
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Furthermore
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if there is no surveillance on
kids
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in free
time
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the
children
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can choose to go outside and make friends and indulge in criminal
activities
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like drugs.   It is
undeniable
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fact that
children
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should not be given the freedom to choose the way they want to spend their free
time
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. It must be either organized by their
parents
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or should be under surveillance for the better growth and brought-up of coming generations.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • balanced development
  • expose children to
  • tailored activities
  • promote discipline
  • foster independence
  • genuine interests
  • free play
  • problem-solving skills
  • emotional well-being
  • unstructured time
  • personal exploration
  • structured activities
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