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The table contains the total amount of people who visit Ashdown Museum during the year before and after refurbishment.

The table contains the total amount of people who visit Ashdown Museum during the year before and after
refurbishment
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. The pie charts
illustrates
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illustrate
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 the differences in
a
Correct article usage
the
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 satisfaction of the visitors between the period before and after
of
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apply
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refurbishment
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.
Overall
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, the total amount of visitors to Ashdown Museum,which was 74,000, increased to 92,000 after it was refurbished.
In addition
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, the
visitors
Correct quantifier usage
number of visitors
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 who were very satisfied
in
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with
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 the museum doubled after
refurbishment
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 when the dissatisfaction decreased dramatically.
According to
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 the pie charts, the section of very satisfied was 15 in the year before
refurbishment
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 and rose up to 35 after the
refurbishment
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while
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 the section of dissatisfied,which was 40,decreased to 15.
Furthermore
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, there was an increase in the part of satisfied which was 30 before and went up to 40. People who were very dissatisfied decreased to 5 which was 10 after
refurbishment
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while
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 people who did not
response
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respond
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 to the survey remained the same in both charts.

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