Some people think that a huge amount of time and money is spent on protection of wild animals, and that this money could be better spent on the human population. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.
it is believed by some that a huge amount of time and money should be spent on protecting wild creatures,
while
others think the human Linking Words
population
are more important to focus on. Use synonyms
Thus
, I certainly believe by preserving the wild animal's habitat will affect simultaneously Linking Words
to
the human Change preposition
apply
population
as well.
Use synonyms
Environment
is indeed paramount Use synonyms
these day
, Change the determiner
this day
these days
many
government and Correct word choice
and many
non profit
Add a hyphen
non-profit
organization
raising Fix the agreement mistake
organizations
voices
and Correct pronoun usage
their voices
focus
on animal conservation. Wrong verb form
focusing
To begin
with, Linking Words
animals
are essential Use synonyms
on
Change preposition
in
Use synonyms
food
chain cycle, Correct article usage
the food
however
, human activities threaten animal's existence Linking Words
on
Change preposition
in
the
nature, it is clearly seen Correct article usage
apply
due to
mining activities, agriculture and illegal hunting lead to some species Linking Words
are
endangered or even extinct. Wrong verb form
being
Thus
, advocating Linking Words
the
Correct article usage
apply
Use synonyms
animals
conservation through funding and Change to a genitive case
animal's
animals'
voluntary
will assist biodiversity and sustainability, Replace the word
volunteering
as a
Linking Words
result
Add the comma(s)
,result
environment
will provide mankind Use synonyms
basic
needs Change preposition
with basic
such
as Linking Words
food
more sustain in the long run.
Use synonyms
On the other hand
, human Linking Words
population
problems are Use synonyms
also
soaring over the years and become more complicated ,especially in the city. Linking Words
In addition
, developing and undeveloped countries had allocated their expense and time to solve problems in Linking Words
a human populations
Correct the article-noun agreement
a human population
human populations
such
as homeless, Linking Words
food
deficiency, education, and health care system, I would argue it is Use synonyms
also
important because it will help their citizen well being and welfare. Linking Words
Although
human problems Linking Words
is
taken the main priority, we can not put aside the nature Change the verb form
are
life
Replace the word
living
environment
because conservating the Use synonyms
environment
and wild Use synonyms
animals
may impact human health by having good air quality and Use synonyms
food
availability. Use synonyms
Thus
, expenditure on the human Linking Words
population
and Use synonyms
animals
must be balanced.
To summarize, raising more money and time to protect wild Use synonyms
animal's
conservation, Change noun form
animals
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
also
provides numerous benefits for human Linking Words
population
Use synonyms
issue
Fix the agreement mistake
issues
such
as Linking Words
food
availability and a good Use synonyms
environment
to live in, thereforetherefore, I strongly agree both benefits will be taken if we focus on protecting Use synonyms
wildlife
Correct article usage
the wildlife
environment
.Use synonyms
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