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The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given first graph illustrates the
percentage
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 of
computer
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 ownership in two different years; meanwhile, the second graph portrays the level of
computer
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 ownership by
education
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 in 2002 and 2010.
Overall
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,
people
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 who owned computers rose from 2002 until 2010 and since the level of
education
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 is higher
computer
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 ownership increased in both years.
To begin
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 with, in 2002
people
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 who owned a
computer
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 was 58%, which rose to 60% in 2014. The
percentage
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 increased until 2010. In 2006 the proportion was 63%, and slightly rose to 60%. In 2010, which is the highest, was 73%.
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, in 2002, the number of
people
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 without a high school diploma was 15% of owned computers. The
percentage
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 increased since the level of
education
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 is higher. The number of
people
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 with postgraduate qualifications was 80%. The same situation happened in 2010. The
people
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 who did not finish high school got 40% and for
people
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 who got their
education
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 master, the
percentage
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 was 98%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, computer, education, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consistent increase
  • growing reliance on technology
  • clear correlation
  • digital divide
  • notable growth
  • most pronounced disparity
  • gap reduced considerably
  • percentage growth
  • higher educational levels
  • educational groups
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