Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment.

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world, we can see
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in
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of
crimes
. Some people argue that there should be fixed punishments for each type of
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,
however
, some others have an opinion that the circumstance and the motivation behind the
crimes
should
also
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into the category that support the second view,
that is
"circumstances and motivation for the
crime
must be considered before fixing the
punishment
. First and foremost, equality must be shown in every department, especially in
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of
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judiciary
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. It is an undeniable fact that
crime
rates all over the world
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showing a decreasing trend and
this
is mainly
due to
the severity of the punishments.
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,
due to
the significant increase in
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crime
towards women many
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the
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countries have increased the intensity of the
punishment
towards
such
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crimes
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.
Punishment
like
death
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penalty and life imprisonment has helped to reduce the
occuring
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occurring
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traffiking
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trafficking
. To be more precise, these
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of initiatives will be very much beneficial to make
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society a safer place.
On the other hand
, there is
also
a chance that criminals may find
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loop holes
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in the law and may trap an innocent person who may not have any connection with that event.
Hence
a genuine investigation must be conducted by the
law abiding
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officials before giving the final verdict of
punishment
. Saudi Arabia has the lowest
crime
rate all over the world
due to
their fair trial which not only
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the circumstances of the
crime
but
also
the motivation for committing the
crime
.
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, when a person commits a
crime
as a part of
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,
this
also
must be valued before giving the final
punishment
.
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, everyone must be served equally by
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the law
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and
the
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justice should not be negatively
inpacted
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impacted
in any
ways
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. As far as
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am concerned,
motive
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and the situation for the
crime
must
also
be considered before fixing the
punishment
, since the
punishment
is mainly given to prevent
the
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future
crimes
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fixed punishments
  • consistency
  • predictability
  • deter crime
  • potential offenders
  • streamline
  • judicial process
  • bias
  • corruption
  • complexity
  • human behavior
  • circumstances
  • justice system
  • intent
  • remorse
  • socio-economic background
  • rehabilitate offenders
  • recidivism rates
  • flexible punishment systems
  • inconsistencies
  • perceived injustices
  • public trust
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