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Band 4.5

Large companies should pay higher salaries to CEOs and executives compared to other workers. To what extent do you agree or disagree? (Write 250 words.)

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Chief Execution Officers and other directors in big
companies
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 should get higher salaries than other lower ones. I strongly agree with that statement because they have
higher
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 responsibility for their
decision making
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, and they always come with better experience and expertise compared to other workers. To lead a company, CEOs and
executives
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are
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the
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key roles
to set
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in setting
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business
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 directions, goals and visions. These roles are responsible for making a decision in relation to all
business
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 strategies that other lower positions might not be able to do so.
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, most big four
companies
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 in Australia are trying to get good
executives
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 to run their businesses, and they generally offer their
potentials
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 with a high salary package. Another reason for
this
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 is that these
executives
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 come with lots of experience and expertise, which can
then
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 satisfy the need of many big
companies
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 to manage their people,
as well as
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 to solve any of the
business
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 issues. For
instant
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, in Australia, there are many
of
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the
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apply
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executive roles being advertised
in
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on
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the
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apply
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job seeker sites, and they obviously state that
who
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those who
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 would like to apply
on
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for
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 each role,
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need to have certain skills and job experiences related to that position. In conclusion, CEOs and
executives
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 are the top level of large
companies
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 who can make hard decisions because they are responsible for doing that,
as well as
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 having sufficient skills and experience to manage the company’s workers and solve
business
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 problems. Because of
this
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, I strongly agree that
companies
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 should pay them more compared to others in the
companies
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.

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coherence and cohesion
The introduction could be more direct in stating your position by clearly outlining the main ideas you will discuss.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that summarizes the main point you will support in that paragraph.
task achievement
Consider providing more specific examples or evidence to reinforce your arguments, which would strengthen your points.
task achievement
Your arguments about the roles and responsibilities of CEOs and executives are well articulated.
coherence and cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes your stance and reinforces your agreement with the statement.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • executive compensation
  • income disparity
  • corporate governance
  • incentive structures
  • ethical considerations
  • competitive advantage
  • demotivation
  • pay structures
  • social inequality
  • talent acquisition
  • company culture
  • economic impact
  • leadership roles
  • employee morale
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