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Band 4.5

Large companies should pay higher salaries to CEOs and executives compared to other workers. To what extent do you agree or disagree? (Write 250 words.)

#companies #salaries #ceos #executives #workers
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It is undeniable that crucial
position
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 in leading corporations, especially CEOs or executive committees require exceptional skill sets
for instance
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 managing
of high
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 vulnerable projects,
collaborating
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and collaborating
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 with
others organization
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other organizations
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 or funding bodies. These roles demand not only advanced knowledge and expertise but
also
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 extensive career
experience
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.
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, their significant
responsibility
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 directly
influence
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company’s
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the company’s
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 direction, revenue and profitability.
Therefore
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, I agree that CEOs and executives should be paid higher salaries than general employees and the reasons
of
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issue
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 will be discussed in detail. In my opinion, I agree with
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by
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 two biggest reasons.
Firstly
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, business administrative
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such
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 as CEOs or
others
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 executives require advanced knowledge and extensive professional
experience
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 not only specialized in
field
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the field
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 of interest but
also
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 in managing of organization
for example
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 human
resource
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resources
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, collaborating with
others
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other
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 firms or
decision making
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decision-making
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 for the firm. Meanwhile, mostly general workers
for instance
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 engineers, accountants or
sale
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sales
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 assistants require expertise to work
own
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their own
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 jobs
not
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involve
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 in significant
decision
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decisions
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 of
company
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the company
a company
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 . Because
pivotal
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the pivotal
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 job requires more skill sets and career
experience
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more
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than general workers. So on, high salaries were paid for them.
Secondly
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,
due to
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administration
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the administration
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 of
CEO
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the CEO
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for example
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make
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making
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 a contract,
collaborate
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collaborating
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 with
government
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along with
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 hire or fire of
worker
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workers
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.
Therefore
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,
CEO’s
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the CEO’s
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 decisions or visions are
paramount
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a paramount
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responsibility
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directly
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that directly
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 influence
company’s
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the company’s
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 direction, profitability or competitive advantage not only company but
also
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 involve general
worker
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workers
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 life and their family. Albeit, the
responsibility
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 of
employee
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the employee
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 is only their job not relevant
in
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main
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 direction of
organization
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the organization
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. For the reasons mentioned above, I believe exceptional skill sets, extensive
experience
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 and high
responsibility
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 of
CEO
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CEOs
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 and executives
suitable
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are suitable
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 for higher salaries.
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logical structure
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central idea and is well-developed with relevant examples or explanations. This can enhance the logical structure of the essay.
relevant specific examples
Try to introduce specific examples or case studies to better illustrate your points. This will make your argument more convincing and relatable.
clear comprehensive ideas
Avoid repeating the same points and practice using a variety of sentence structures and vocabulary to maintain reader interest and clarity.
introduction conclusion present
The essay provides a clear position on the topic, agreeing that CEOs and executives should receive higher salaries, and it is stated in both the introduction and conclusion.
complete response
The discussion includes relevant points about the responsibility and skill set required for CEOs and executives, which is critical to their justification for higher salaries.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • executive compensation
  • income disparity
  • corporate governance
  • incentive structures
  • ethical considerations
  • competitive advantage
  • demotivation
  • pay structures
  • social inequality
  • talent acquisition
  • company culture
  • economic impact
  • leadership roles
  • employee morale
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