Once children start school, teachers become a more important influence on children's intellectual and social development than parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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youngster's cognitive

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and social well-being,

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others opine that

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involvement is vital .

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children

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amount of time with educators in

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.Teachers assist them to solve various mathematical sums and to resolve

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behaviour left

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positive impression on

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nature inspired them to be

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department of NYU (Newyork University) in 2015 among various

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from different states

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88 % of students prefer educators as a role

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it is proved my view that mentors play an important role in personal development .

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with ,there are numerous reasons that few individuals opine that

parents

are critical for

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mental and social

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parents

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with

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since birth so they know their needs without even telling them.Every now and

then

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give a hand to

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activities

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as buying groceries where they learn to use simple

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which requires in

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life .It is often seen if

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maintain excellent relationships with neighbours and

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which

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encourage

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to adopt in their life .To

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newspaper revealed that

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parents

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footfall

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,Even though few masses believe that

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are crucial still I strongly

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that teachers are the

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who

guide

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children

in various aspects of life and assist to improve social intellectual and social development .

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