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A friend who is planning to visit you has asked you to describe the most interesting and enjoyable things to do in the community where you currently live. Write an email to your friend, tell about these things. In your email: •Say what these things are •Say why they are interesting/enjoyable •Suggest what you can do together

#friend #visit #community #email #•say #•suggest
Dear Raghav, I hope you are doing well. I heard that you are making plans to visit me. I am so excited,that I already have an itinerary in mind. There are so many places where we can go
such
 as water parks, beaches, waterfront, and many more. It's gonna be so much fun. We will have some beers once you reach - our good old days. we hit up some cool spots in the city - in the downtown area. We can do skydiving, I remember , it used to be on our to-do list. It's gonna be so much fun. Please let me know when you are planning to come here so that I can make reservations
accordingly
 and so that I can take days off from my office. I would love to hang out with you all day and will recall our memories. I can't wait to see you. I
also
 have some gossip to tell about our childhood friends. Your friend, Bhavika
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You might want to add a bit more detail about why the places are interesting or enjoyable. For instance, describe a specific beach activity or what makes the downtown area exciting.
coherence cohesion
Consider breaking up some of the activities into individual paragraphs for better readability. For example, one paragraph for the places you can visit, another for the activities, and a final one for personal anecdotes or plans.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing are friendly and natural, making the letter feel genuine and personal.
task achievement
The tone is very suitable for a letter to a friend; it's warm, inviting, and enthusiastic.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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