Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest time of most people's lives, others think that adult life brings more happiness, inspite of greater responsibility. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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It is true that some criminals who have been punished chose to break the law for the second time. There are many reasons behind
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trend, and governments and societies should make much more
efforts
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to eliminate/ help them. There are many reasons behind
this
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trend, and governments and societies should make much more
efforts
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to eliminate/ help them.
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with, the states have already collected
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through
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many ways. All
spendings
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by residents would involve a part of
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academic
taxes. So the students who are studying in private
schools
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have paid educational taxations on their
tuition
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.
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, if someone paid his
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tuition
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, a small part of his
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would be possessed by the management which is work for education.
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private
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students do not get any knowledge or advantages from the public academic system. The students would be unwilling to pay money to state
authourities
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authorities
. The families would suffer from more economic stress if states ask taxes from them. The
tuition
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fees
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of private
schools
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are more expensive than the
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in
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the
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public
schools
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. Additional
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may cause some financial
crisis
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to
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specific families.
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, their life
declines
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, which might lead to disappointment with
governmnets
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governments
government
.
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, a poor family afford their kids to
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primary
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,
they
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and they
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have not only
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the expensive fee from
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, but
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the taxes from
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education system. They have to give up to let their kid go to
school
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it is necessary for the academic systems to receive some taxations, it is not reasonable to ask
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fees
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from
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families which have children in primary educational systems.
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