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Study shows that many criminals have low levels of education. For this reason, some people believe that the best way to reduce crime is to educate people in prison, so that they can get a job when they leave prison. Do you agree or disagree?

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The research shows that in general many
people
 who have a lower level of
education
 might have higher possibilities to commit a crime.
As a result
, some
people
 argue that the best solution to solve
this
 problem
is educate
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criminals
 in prison and help them to get a full-time job. But there are some different perspectives, so we should discuss
this
 issue from both angles. It is true that teaching
people
 various types of knowledge could help them cultivate their own skills to get a better job position, which could give the
criminals
 a chance to re-contribute their confidence and help them join
the
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apply
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society again after they leave prison.
Likewise
, a higher level of
education
 could help
people
 earn better salaries, so they would not commit a crime
such
 as stealing in the store just because for
living
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a living
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. Another point is that when
criminals
 be educated, they would realize that they did something wrong.
However
, in some cases, the degree of
education
 is not the only factor to affects
people
 to commit a crime.
For instance
,
people
 who graduated from the university but still drugging or hurting others, because they might have some trauma in their childhood.
In addition
, the government have to spend a great deal of money to afford the cost of
criminals
’
education
, and it would be a burden to the whole society. In conclusion, I personally agree that educating
criminals
 in prison is a good way to help them get the job and teach them what is right or wrong.
Nevertheless
,
this
 is not a certain way to solve the problem, so we should consider other methods to build a better community.
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