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As countries develop, more and more people buy and use their own cars. Do you think the advantages of this trend for individuals outweibgh the disadvantages for the environment?

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Nowadays there are more
cars
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 manufactured by countries, and more
people
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 tend to buy and use private vehicles.
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 using
cars
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 is more convenient, the devastating effects of using more
cars
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 are more than the benefits. On the one hand, using a private
car
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 makes life easier for
people
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 in many ways.
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, by having their own
car
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,
people
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 do not have to use infrequent and overcrowded public transportation.
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 means they reach their workplace on time and without experiencing any hardship. Take a man who wants to go to work on a snowy day
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; if he does not have his own
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, the process of reaching to office will be really hard for him.
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, Having their own
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, families can travel more frequently and more conveniently.
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,
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 of
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 trend children can have more fun, and family ties can be more strong .
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, producing more
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 has a damaging effect on the environment.
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 with, the more
car
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 is produced by countries, the more carbon dioxide will release into the atmosphere. Increasing the level of greenhouse emissions will result in global warming, and
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 would pose a fatal danger to the human race.
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, global warming may cause a decrease in crop production.
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 means that
people
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 around the world may face problems like shortage in food resources.
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, supplying more
cars
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 may deteriorate the air quality. Since bad air quality is the root cause of numerous diseases, producing more
cars
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 is a real danger to
people
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's well-being. In conclusion, even though for many, having a private vehicle makes life simpler, the long-term negative effects by no means are comparable with the advantages and the government should devise and impose schemes to restrict the annual number of
cars
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 produced by manufacturers.
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