Many think that religion should be taught in schools, while others think it should be avoided.

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has always been a debatable topic
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. Some traditionalists believe that
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in
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separate
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for
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. another group of
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claims
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classes
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should be
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away from
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.
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essay will explore both perspectives and provide a personal opinion that
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should be taught in
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or not. The prime factor responsible for
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to be taught in
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is to remember
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history
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of
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and to teach youngsters
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in god. Nowadays youngsters mostly spend their time on modern tech devices,
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which they hardly know about
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religion
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and some don't even
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in worship, and second place where
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mostly spend their time is
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, if they will be taught about their
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in
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,
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they will know the
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of their
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, follow the path of
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as a matter of fact they will
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in worship, meditation which will help them to become a better human being.
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Regular teaching about different religions in school will promote inequality.
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is a place where
students
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from different religions study together in
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class, which promotes equality that every student is equal, but if there will be
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classes
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on
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then
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all those
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will be separated into different
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which will divide them and
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can be very dangerous for
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generation, because of
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factor India has faced so many problems in
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.
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,
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religion
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classes
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should not be promoted in
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. All in all,
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is a place where youngster learns everything, so it will be really good for youngsters if they will learn about their
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in
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schools
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as they will start
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belief
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in worship, but in my
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this
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should be avoided because
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will promote inequality between
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, which can result into a big problem in future.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • religious education
  • multi-faith society
  • values and ethics
  • tolerance
  • diversity
  • religious freedom
  • secular education
  • curriculum
  • worldviews
  • interfaith dialogue
  • religious literacy
  • moral guidance
  • cultural understanding
  • critical thinking
  • respect
  • indoctrination
  • religious beliefs
  • secular state
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