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People nowadays tend to have children at older ages. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages

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Nowadays, it is likely that people will have their
children
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 when they get old.
Although
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 giving
birth
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 later in life comes with some difficulties,
however
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, it helps the parent to be financially and psychologically prepared which I believe outweighs the disadvantages as the difficulties can be corrected with adequate medical intervention.
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, a lack of adequate readiness can result in mental damage to both parents and
children
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.
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 with, having financial solidity and mental maturity to cater to and care for kids cannot be over-emphasized. Being able to provide for the needs of your
children
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 is one joy of parenthood and it
also
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 tells in the upbringing of the kids,
children
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 born by parents with sane minds and financial stability enjoy their childhood with the majority of their needs met.
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, a couple in my place of work has been married for 10 years before they decided to have
children
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 and their reason was that they want to have stability in their finances before they start bringing kids in, surprisingly to some extent they are doing pretty well before they have their first child and they were able to give the child the best.
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, the process of childbirth is an amazing process that requires youthful strength to reduce the risk of many health
complications
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, giving
birth
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 later in life can lead to
complications
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such
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 as
birth
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 defects, preeclampsia, maternal mortality, child mortality,
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, a pregnant woman of 45years old will be at risk of many of the
complications
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 discussed above, many people believe that these disadvantages outweigh many benefits attached to giving
birth
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 later in life. In conclusion, no matter the
complications
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 faced during childbirth in old age, being financially stable and emotionally ready is far way better off.
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