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More and more people no longer read newspaper or watch TV programs to get news. They get news about the world through the internet. Is this a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays,
due to
 technological developments
people
 slightly stop to read
newspapers
 or watching
TV
 shows to get new
news
,
instead
this
, they just get
information
 about the world via the
internet
. Will it be a good development for humanity or will give negative consequences
.
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 I love you. On the one hand, our generation is not interested in reading
newspapers
 or watching
TV
news
. Because there you can not get enough
information
.
Moreover
, you were not able to discuss it with other
people
.
However
,
newspapers
 and
TV
 shows guaranteed security. They do not give wrong data.
Furthermore
, no one can hack
TV
news
 programs,
in addition
, it is impossible to rewrite
information
 which gives
newspapers
.
On the other hand
, all the fresh
news
firstly
 will be recorded on the
Internet
.
Also
, today's
people
 frequently use
internet
information
.
However
, there are a number of negative consequences
such
 as discrimination, sites which are censored where they openly demonstrate killing etc. All these factors and data affect the psychology of teenagers. And
this
 kind of thing will be for them normally.
Moreover
, most parts of countries fight with each other's
due to
information
 war. They just distribute some
information
 about the
country
 and the citizens of the
country
 who have been offended start to give other data about the
country
. So, in
this
 ,sequence
people
 destroy the well-being of the
country
. In conclusion, I want to say that
this
 development at that moment gives only negative consequences.
However
, In my ,mind it will be more beneficial If government assigns some sites which contain special licenses to distribute
information
.
Also
, it will be better If government pay strict attention to
news
 on the
Internet
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Accessibility
  • Democratizes access to information
  • Real-time updates
  • Misinformation
  • Diverse range of sources
  • Multiple perspectives
  • Critical thinking
  • Reinforce biases
  • Information overload
  • Decline of traditional media
  • Innovation and adaptation
  • Interactive forms of news consumption
  • Engagement
  • Echo chambers
  • Unverified information
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