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In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by international fast foods. Some people believe this exerts a negative effect on both families and societies. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Nowadays, it is becoming common for
people
 to consume fast foods. Some
people
 believe that
this
 trend has a negative impact on both families and societies.
However
, I firmly agree that replacing traditional
food
 with international can bring a negative impact on families and societies for 2 main reasons. The main reason is
junk
food
 is unhealthy
food
. It contains preservatives that can be harmful to
people
's metabolism. By consuming
junk
food
,
people
 can easily get sick because of the chemical material in
food
,
such
 as nitrate. For illustration, consuming hotdogs every day can make
people
 easily get cancer.
As a result
, the life rate of the country will decrease
due to
 consuming
junk
food
. The following reason is consuming fast
food
 can make the sales of traditional
cuisine
 fall. Traditional
food
 is one of the identities of society.
Nevertheless
, in
this
 modern era, many
people
 opt the international
junk
food
 because it is easier to find and cook.
For instance
, a busy mother tends to buy McDonald's for breakfast for her children rather than buy nasi lemak, the traditional
food
 of Indonesia. By opting the
junk
food
, society consumes less traditional
food
.
Consequently
, the demand for traditional
cuisine
 will decline year after year. It will make traditional
cuisine
 hard to find.
To sum up
, presently, an increasing number of
people
 are choosing international fast
food
. Many
people
 argue that
this
 trend will lead to some drawbacks for families and society. I am firmly convinced agree that
this
 trend can bring negative effects,
such
 as an impact on the health of
people
 and the sales of traditional
cuisine
 will decrease.
Thus
, it will be a wise decision to consume healthy
food
such
 as traditional
food
.
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