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Some people believe physical education classes should be mandatory for all school aged children. Some people argue children should use their spare time on academic purpose. Discuss both point of views and give an opinion

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Some argue the fact that physical education should be an obligatory subject for all
schools
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 level and ages. Others believe that the time dedicated to
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 subject should be used for more useful arguments. In my opinion,
sports
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 must be included in the subjects list, and I will explain why. I always claim the fact that
sports
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 and physical
activities
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 are brilliant ways to stimulate and activate people's brains. In fact, it is demonstrated by science that making practical efforts is incredibly healthy and has positive effects on a person's state of mind.
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, students will be more concentrated on their studies and future goals. I
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 think that those kinds of moments are extremely helpful to include disabled children with the rest of the group.
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,
schools
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 will create a sane atmosphere and, in general, will form better citizens.
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, executing workouts at
schools
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 should be a choice. Actually, there could be guys with other targets who want to practice for other purposes.
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, there is
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 the possibility to play
sports
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 after study time.
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, doing
activities
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 with schoolmates should be seen as a waste of time or - in the same way - should
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 be considered a form of shame because of the lack of confidence in physical
activities
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. In conclusion, I believe that
schools
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 should be an instrument used to do physical
activities
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.
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, I believe that consuming energy doing
sports
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 increases concentration and self-esteem,
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this
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 should be a personal decision, respecting everyone's attitudes and behaviours.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overall health
  • physical activity
  • mandatory
  • teamwork
  • social skills
  • academic performance
  • concentration
  • stress relief
  • career prospects
  • intellectual development
  • extracurricular activities
  • compulsory
  • flexibility
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