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Nowadays some buildings such as offices and school have open space design instead of separate rooms . Why it is so ?Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

These days facilities are characterised by open and large areas
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 of single and dedicated rooms.
This
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 is considered a modern trend and it is always more diffused, in fact
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 public buildings,
such
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 as schools and offices, and not only private houses follow
this
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 trend. In my opinion,
this
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 has both positive and negative impacts on people's days. I think that
this
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 trend
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 created a few years ago with the aim
to break
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 up traditional and classical layouts.
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, it is considered one of the most innovative design solutions of our day and,
as a consequence
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, large spaces delimitated only by necessary walls are now proposed in every contest.
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, nowadays new offices are almost all designed with the open space formula, just adding some private rooms for delicate cases.
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,
this
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 style is considered synonymous with modernity and it indicates a brilliant sense of aesthetics. Even if
this
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 style follows the modern canons of beauty, I claim the fact it is a negative development, mainly for three reasons.
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working in a wide area increases the risk of a decrease in attention. In fact, open spaces imply more contact between individuals and,
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, more noise and more difficulty in slot optimization.
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, businesses require the need for private zones to face critical situations.
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, sales and salaries are private discussions that should be dealt with in some peace and quiet.
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, keeping a wide number of people working together in the same room
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 the chance
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 about workmates and,
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, brings bad moods in the office. In conclusion, I believe that the open space should be used in some specific contests.
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, I argue that public buildings or facilities with a lot of people inside should be organized in different ways. In the same way, domestic and private spaces should be managed as
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 prefer.

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