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Most people do not care enough about environmental issues. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

#people #care
In the
worldwide
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 there are many people who don’t pay attention to environmental problems.
Unfortunately
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,Unfortunately
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 human’s wrong
behavior
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behaviour
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 has
negative
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a negative
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 impact on the environment. In the following essay, I will dissolve both
side
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sides
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about
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of
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this
 issue. Human activities have a serious effect on the world’s environment for several reasons. I want to mention one of those.
According to
significant
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the significant
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difference
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differences
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 between countries’
occasion
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occasions
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such
 as culture,politics,economics ,
society
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and society
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 are involved in serious problems,
for example
 in third world countries some people because of poverty don’t have enough motivation to care about
environment
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the environment
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.
Furthermore
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 children-school should
be learn
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learn
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necessary
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the necessary
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activity
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activities
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 to
keeping
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keep
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 natural beauty and
preventing
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prevent
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 pollution.
On the other
hand
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,hand
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 many organizations take
an
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apply
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action to conservation of nature.
For
instance
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,instance
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 they encourage people to gather rubbish
on
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in
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 the famous area and plant trees or reduce of using plastic bags ,
use
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and use
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 natural materials. In conclusion,
government
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the government
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 should make a role
about
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in
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this
 in
the
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society to taking care would be obligatory and
consequently
natures
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nature
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 wouldn’t be destroyed.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • immediate needs
  • connect with
  • distant
  • abstract
  • economic considerations
  • growing awareness
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  • initiatives
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  • well-being
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