Nowadays, bickering has a common trend amongst youngsters and married people. This had led to polygamy and high divorce rates. Justify the response with your positive or negative view.

There is a prevailing that bickering is becoming
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amongst couples and the number of people who were married.
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my honest opinion, quarrelling with
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, especially a spouse, has negative feelings on human relationships. There are
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several reasons for my argument. On one hand, an argument between
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is likely to turn into a cold war and there is no end.
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stems from the fact they
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don't
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with their problem.
In addition
, they hardly ever spend time
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communicating
with each other.
As a result
, they easily became frustrated when they have a tiny trouble.
For instance
, various husbands told that their wives are bossy, they often tell them what they have to do every
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, but actually, they have no idea that their wives just need a listener and help
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with their
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housework
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the other hand, it is linked to the
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of each individual.
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, men and women both have their own pride, they unwillingly humble themselves in any quarrel.
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, in Vietnam, the percentage of divorce has
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rapidly because they believe that they
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right, so they don’t refuse to confess their faults. In conclusion, constant arguments and quarrels usually derive from the incapacity of addressing problems related to married people’s matters and personal pride.
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