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The chart below shows the information on how frequently people in the USA ate in fastfood restaurants between 2003 and 2013

The chart below shows the information on how frequently people in the USA ate in fastfood restaurants between 2003 and 2013
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The bar chart illustrates how often
people
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 eat in the USA fast
food
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restaurants
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 between 2003 and 2013.
Overall
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, it is evident that there are more
people
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 who eat once a week and twice a month
whereas
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 few
people
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 eat every day in fast
food
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restaurants
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.
To begin
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, in 2003, the
percentage
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 of
people
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 that eats every day in fast
food
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restaurants
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 is just under 5% and in the other remaining years is the same
percentage
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 of about 3%.
However
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, among
people
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 that eat more in fast
food
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restaurants
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 several times a week 20% in 2006 followed by over 15% of
people
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 that eats in 2003 and 2013.
Also
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,
people
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 over 30% which is the highest eats once a week in the fast
food
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restaurants
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 in 2006 and approximately 31% of
people
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 in 2003 and a low number of
people
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 just under 30% in 2013.
Furthermore
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, there are a significant number of
people
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 that eats in fast
food
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restaurants
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 once or twice a month in 2013 which is the highest compared to others and a low
percentage
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 of 25% in 2006.
Although
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, among
people
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 who eat a few times a year are more in 2006 and 2013 the same
percentage
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 of 15% and
people
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 who never eat in fast
food
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restaurants
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 are less than 5% in 2006 and 2013.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, food, restaurants, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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