Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime.other,however,argue that the circumstances of an individual crime,and the motivation for committing it,should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Disscuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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is essential regardless of the

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and the motivations. Yet, others argue

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point of view. I am in favour of the latter statement since different approaches to criminals can not guarantee a safe environment for citizens. On one

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some segments of societies strongly believe that punishments ought to be always the same without considering the

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during committing the

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and the intention which has led to it. To illustrate, one reason is that should there

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some exceptions in the

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of some particular cases, it will not be as effective as it is supposed to be in order to prevent

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crime

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from occurring again.

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, if some exceptions were taken into account considering the conditions,

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what would happen to justice? All victims deserve to obtain justice so under no

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reduction in

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would be accepted.

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, looking at the point that some specific conditions or motivations may force individuals to commit a

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, there may be a chance to make some changes in their

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point of view insists on the assumption that not all criminals are the same so they should not be treated equally. One explanation for

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sometimes particular

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trigger individuals to commit crimes and they may not be aware of the irreparable consequences they will face.

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critical economical situations more and more children in poverty have committed robbery or theft in order to make a living. Obviously, they should not be treated the same as serious criminals. From my perspective, regardless of what makes individuals violate a law, they have to accept the consequences and take the punishments.

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, if the victims are convinced and willing to sacrifice their rights, there can be some exceptions. In conclusion,

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it is commonly accepted that there has to be non-changeable

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for each particular

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, some others believe that considering the same

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is not fair regarding what triggers them. I believe

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is a

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no matter what particularly when it comes to serious crimes

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as murder.

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