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More and more plastic waste is polluting the world’s cities, countryside and oceans. What problems does this cause? What measures could be taken to solve them?

#plastic #waste #world’s #cities #countryside #oceans #measures
Nowadays, humanity is trying to solve the pollution which used plastics have been creating in the
megapolices
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, rural areas and water sources.
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led
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millions
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 animals and increasing global temperature
level
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. I can suggest solutions like responsible recycling and creating goods from
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ecofriendly
materials
. It is clear, that up tendency of
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 species and
warming
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the warming
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 of the planet
caused
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 by the usage of
plastic
. Presently, a lot of wild animals and fish consume a huge amount of
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non-recycled
materials
,
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 is leading to the impossibility to continue their life.
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, the pollutions make our ecosystem damaged, and
as a
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 more sunlights reach our land and create
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warming.
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, the
last
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research
 demonstrates that our nature protection works
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40% less
effective
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 than used to work 50 years ago. Substitute harmful
materials
 in the goods-production
to
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the
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fast recycled ones
in addition
 to the more
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beneficial
destroying
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 of the used products
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the best solutions. It will
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 for
the
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all organisms if the states will start to
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transform
plastic-trash
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plastic trash
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 into something else, or they will
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 a smart system of destroying
plastic
,
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 is leading to
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better conditions of life in the
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 and cities.
Moreover
, the items
which
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made from
the
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fast-resycled
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fast-recycled
materials
 decompose faster
that
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 common
plastic
 and despite some
meaning
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not
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 contain harmful
elemnts
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elements
.
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, the British
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scientists
 found out that
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ecofriendly
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 goods decompose becoming
decompased
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decomposed
in
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33 times faster than
plastic
. In
conclusion
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i
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 would like to mention that despite the damage of harmful
plastic
pollutions
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 to our environment, which is leading to
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animal extinction and the heating of the planet
,
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 if our society will take all the obligation and will start to reduce
the
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plastic
 usage in the manufactory and will recycle
plastic
-items more responsible - we can avoid
this problems
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