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Many things that used to be done in the home by hands are now being done by machines Does this development bring more advantage or disadvantage

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It is a fact that
,
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 the physical efforts in houses are replaced by technical
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
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. The benefits like
time saving
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 by
such
 advanced technologies are far more than the drawbacks. There are
few
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 disadvantages, which can bring up by the development of
machineries
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machinery
types of machinery
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in households in terms of energy consumption. To illustrate, the excess usage of
such
 items can lead to huge electricity use in peak hours and there will be huge demand.
Hence
 there will be more energy production and that creates pollution by burning
lot
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 of fossil fuels
as well as
 surging energy prices.
On the other hand
,
such
 instruments can be beneficial and comfortable for mankind in many ways.
Firstly
, it will reduce the physical strain which
need
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 to take to complete the
works
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work
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 in a home. To explain, cleaning floors and laundry were an herculean task in
early
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the early
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 days, and people got exhausted after doing
such
 jobs. But after the arrival of vacuum cleaners and washing machines, it became easy to handle
such
 situations. Apart from that, the technologies saved lots of
time
 in daily life which
supposed
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 to be used fruitfully . It took several hours to finish certain tasks in houses ,
thus
 it caused mental stress in people.
Whereas
 these jobs are handed over to mechanical
house holds
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households
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 and now they can spend leisure
time
 with family by watching movies and reading books.,
Furthermore
 the perfection and convenience
offers
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offered
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 by these facilities cannot attain by
hands
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hand
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.
For example
, the utensils and plates after a meal can be cleaned in a dishwasher and the result will be better than human effort. In conclusion, the usage of
such
 devices for hose jobs can bring several advantages in terms of relief from manual work , providing extra
time
as well as
give
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 satisfaction.The only disadvantage of
such
 development is high usage in critical
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