The chart below shows the results of a survey of people who visited four types of tourist attraction in Britain in the year 1999. Summarise it.

The chart below shows the results of a survey of people who visited four types of tourist attraction in Britain in the year 1999. Summarise it.
The line graph illustrates changes in
working
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age
of adults in France,
United
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the United
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States, Japan,
Germany
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and Germany
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over the period of ninety
years
from 1960 to 2050. As seen from the graph in Japan in the first twenty
years
the
age
was only increasing.
However
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the
number
significantly decreased to
the
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fiftyfive
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fifty-five
fifty five
years
from 1980 to 2020 and it continued to fall for the next thirty
years
resulting in the
age
of
fiftyone
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fifty-one
fifty one
.
On the other hand
after facing some fluctuations for the first fifty
years
the
age
in France climbed to
sixtyfive
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sixty five
sixty-five
from
sixtythree
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sixty-three
sixty three
.
Then
it unfortunately went into nosedive to the
age
of
fiftyseven
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fifty-seven
fifty seven
in 2050. in 1960 the
age
of working was ranked the lowest to
the
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sixty
percent
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per cent
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in the United States. For the following twenty
years
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,years
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the
number
slightly went up to the
sixtysix
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sixty-six
sixty six
.
Nevertheless
, after all those
increasments
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increases
increments
the
number
dramatically fell to sixty in 2040 and remained steady for the
nest
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next
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decade.From 1960 to 1970 the
age
of workers in
germany
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Germany
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decreased
for
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by
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ten
percents
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percent
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.Indeed the
number
plunged to seventy in 2020 being the highest rate among
other
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the other
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three countries.After
that
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,that
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it dramatically sank to
fifty five
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fifty-five
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in 2050.
Overall
,between 1960 and 2050 only the
age
of workers from
United
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the United
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States remained untouched.Other countries' ages
decresed
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decreased
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, years, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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