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Are companies should have Corporate social responsibility? Give arguments and express your opinion

#companies #responsibility #arguments
Some
people
 argue that business is organized in order to make
profit
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a profit
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 and any action inspired by ‘social responsibility’ is ‘unbusinesslike’.
Idea
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The idea
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 of
this
 way of thinking is that social responsibility is only for
human
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humans
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, corporations are out of
this
 game.
Main
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 argument of
such
people
 is that in
free
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a free
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, private-property, democratic society where
CEO
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the CEO
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 is just an employee of the business owners. His main aim is to make as much money as
company
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a company
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 can and to keep stockholders satisfied. It would be incorrect for him to spend investors’ money on charity or
such
 a thing.
Overall
,
chief
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the chief
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 executive is responsible only to the owners, he has to maximize profits by all means.
However
, others say that companies have
social
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a social
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 duty because they are made in order to serve
people
 and meet their needs.
Main
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 idea is that
businessman
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businessmen
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 should adhere to conventional standards of morality. One of the arguments is that brand consumers are all from
the
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apply
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society, so companies are responsible
to
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for
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 it and should do everything to make them pleased. Corporations have a duty to
people
, they should care about them: help local communities, donate to charity and etc.
To sum up
, I do not support the
idead
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idea
 of corporate social responsibility. We live in a
democratic
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 where everyone is free to do what they want, so companies should not be obliged to do good things. As Milton
freedman
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Freedman
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 said it is
responsibility
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the responsibility
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 of the government, to which enterprises pay taxes.
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