It is important for people to take riske, both in their professional lives and their personal lifes. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is important for
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to take risks in order to become more successful in both occupational and private life.
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it has been proven that in many cases leads to huge gains.
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it will be explained why the benefits of taking risks outweigh its drawbacks.
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with, taking venture leads to many positive outcomes in people’s life. We all live in a competitive world and
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have to try as many different methods as possible to overcome obstacles and become prosperous. making decisions that other people would not dare to make in many cases ends up with considerable benefits. Like
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, during 2008th economical-crisis Elon Musk the well-known entrepreneur of
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had not
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decided to divide all of his
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Tesla Motors and Space-X company in order to save them both. His risk paid off and both corporations have overcome the breakdown and now he is the richest man in the world. Another advantage of making adventure is that it allows especially gifted persons to dare to show what they really are capable of,
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it leads to new ideas and outcomes which could be profitable for all
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.
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, there are some impediments
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taking
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. Deciding without having a plan and thinking
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aspects of the possible result in the name of taking
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might end with some catastrophic consequences. Like
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, during
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and 90th Japanese were borrowing huge amounts of money from their local banks and
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it in
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market without considering how
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, it led to a financial breakdown and left many citizens in poverty. In conclusion,
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taking risks may make someone face problems, I believe the possible effects like overcoming major difficulties undoubtedly outweigh its drawbacks.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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