Some species of animals are almost extinct; and many others seem to be fast approaching a similar risk. What are the reasons for this? ~ What should be done to solve this problem?

One of the most
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pressing
environmentally
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concerns of the modern age is animal conservation. It is apparent that means
species
of
animals
are facing
instiction
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institution
instruction
which has
devasteting
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devastating
consequences for the diversity of life on our planet. The purpose of
this
essay is to
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examine
the reason for
this
problem and suggest some
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preventative
preventive
measure
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. The measure
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to the
survivel
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survival
of animal
species
is
human kind
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humankind
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.
This
is clear in the legal pouching of
indangerous
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dangerous
in dangerous
animals
,
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like
tigger
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tiggers
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and rhinos
whcih
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which
are hunted for sport and
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sold
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on the black market. Many
species
of fish are
also
the victims of
overfishe
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overfishing
overfished
, which has a
disastrois
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disastrous
on the fish
numbers
.
However
, we have
also
have
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a profound effect on animal life in the way in which we live. Rapid
urbazition
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urbanization
urbanisation
over the
lass
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last
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one hundred years has had a
highley
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highly
destrotive
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destructive
event effect as cities and towns in
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on many
animals
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animals'
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ecosystems.
Also
, in order to sustain our grown population, more and more
species
is
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are
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needed for
agricultor
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agriculture
.
This
is most
evidence
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in the
desflorastation
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deforestation
of the
amazon
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rain forest which has indangerous many
species
. One
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negative human influence can be seen in the changing environment. Animal
eco-systems
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are the result of millions of years of
evollution
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evolution
whereby the
animals
have
adapated
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adapted
to their surround at an
incredable rait
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incredible rate
which could have
cataclyzems
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cataclysms
results for many
animals
. A
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example of
this
is the habitat
og
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of
the pool bear which is expected to
be drastically reduce
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over the next few decades.
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this problems
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these problems
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, there are some measures that could be taken to
adress
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address
the problem.
Goovernment
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Government
arrounds
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around
the world need to share
responsability
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responsibility
for
procted
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protected
animals
and implement more
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severe
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punishement
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punishment
punishments
for
animals
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animal
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poonchers
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poachers
punchers
and hunters. We can
also
have large
procted
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protected
areas and national parks where
humany
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human
activities
is
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limited. Perhaps, the most difficult problem to
adress
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address
is that of climate change which would mean a dramatic change in human behaviour. In conclusion, we can see that humans are having a very negative
affect
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effect
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on
animals
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numbers
. We need to take
responsability
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responsibility
for the
protetion
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protection
of
animals
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animal
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numbers
by reducing the
numbers
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number
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of
animals
beeing
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being
killed
directely
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directly
and
indirectely
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indirectly
by human activity.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • species extinction
  • endangered animals
  • biodiversity
  • habitat loss
  • deforestation
  • urbanization
  • poaching
  • illegal wildlife trade
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • conservation efforts
  • legislation
  • enforcement
  • human overpopulation
  • sustainable development
  • responsible consumption
  • education
  • awareness programs
  • protected areas
  • wildlife reserves
  • international cooperation
  • collaboration
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