The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

I agree with the mentioned statement to an extent. It is true that the
overall
health standards of the population will likely deteriorate in the coming years, given the increase in pollution levels of water, air and soil. Many know that the blanket of air surrounding us and responsible for life,
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, is at
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potential risk of turning toxic for the human lungs considering the excessive combustion of fossil fuels and natural resources
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occurring
at an enormous rate.
However
, one must
also
consider the increased awareness amongst the citizens of
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with readily accessible information on our electronic devices. As a whole, we are moving towards the ideal goal of sustainable development; ensuring to leave enough resources for our successive generations
while
fostering care for the environment throughout.
Moreover
, with the latest and ongoing technological advancements, scientists and researchers have managed to build non-invasive facilities for medical diagnosis and surgeries. These ensure early and safe treatment of patients, saving vital time
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doctors and patients alike.
Additionally
, post-pandemic people belonging to every
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have realised the value of a good body constitution and are actively taking steps to improve their lifestyle and are making better health-related choices. At present, it may seem like the earth is burning, but if we look at the bright side, we
also
see the numerous developments
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race has successfully achieved to safeguard our future.
Thus
, I am hopeful that with the right intentions and decisions, we can embark on our journey towards our betterment and healing
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the wounds of our past, provided we stay united and manage to look past our differences.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Standard of health
  • 2. Average
  • 3. Lower
  • 4. Future
  • 5. Aging population
  • 6. Chronic diseases
  • 7. Sedentary lifestyle
  • 8. Lack of exercise
  • 9. Poor dietary habits
  • 10. Environmental pollution
  • 11. Technological advancements
  • 12. Impact on health
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