the gragh below shows the number of hours per day on average that children spent watching television.

The presented
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depicts the number of
hours
per
day
that children spent in front of TV shows between 1950 and 2010. Children's television viewing
have
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been less than one hour in a
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period between 1950 to 1960.
Moreover
, it grows significantly to nearly 4
hours
a
day
in 1970. The average time spending to watch television
has
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peaked in 1975 but
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plunged to less than 4
hours
in 1980.
Furthermore
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graph
has a
slightly
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rise to more than 4
hours
per
day
in 1990 and
make
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the highest summit in the
graph
. After ,that it
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declined to about 4
hours
a
day
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average in 2010. To sum
, the
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has a fluctuation between 1970 to 2010 which illustrate that the average number of
hours
is nearly 4
hours
a
day
for 40 years and children spent watching TV shows more than before.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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