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Nowadays university education is very expensive. Some people say that universities should reduce their fees, especially for the less fortunate students or for those coming from rural areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In
the
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recent years,
here
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there
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 has been a significant increase in the
univerisity
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university
fees
, which has made it
difficut
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difficult
 for the less
privilaged
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privileged
students
 to get good education.
This
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universities
 must decrease
the
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tution
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tuition
fees
 or find other alternatives.
Firstly
, education is the foundation
to create
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for creating
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 a developed society. There is a direct correlation that the developed countries have
higheducation
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higher education
 quality.
Especially their
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universities
 can create many doctors, scientists,
experts
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and experts
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 in numerous fields.
Furthermore
, these experts assist their countries with great research, boosting the economy, education, science, medicine, etc.
Therefore
, every nation needs a highly educated and productive workforce but the high
fees
 at
universities
 prevent the opportunities from reaching all classes of people.
Besides
,
students
 are under great financial pressure, having
the
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less sufficient learning than they are possible. As we know, there are many
students
 who work part-time to pay their
tution
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tuition
fees
 and to buy books.
Secondly
, the governments are trying to reduce the disparities among social classes, enabling us to escape from the period when only
elite
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the elite
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 could study in
universities
.
Therefore
, reducing
universities
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fees
 contributes to reaching equality for humanity.
On the other hand
, some people state/agree that reducing
fees
 in
universities
resemble
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resembles
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 reducing the value of
universities
.
As a result
,
universities
, perhaps, are becoming less competitive than they used to and the quality of
universities
 does not evolve intensively.
Moreover
,
universities
 are not able to get a lot of revenue and
this
 definitely has some adverse effect/influence on their operations
in particular
 and economic development in general.
To sum up
, the merits of reducing
fees
 in
universities
 outweigh keeping high tuition
fees
.
Therefore
, the government should support
eligiable
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eligible
students
 with scholarships and implement less interest on educational loans.
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