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Nowadays university education is very expensive. Some people say that universities should reduce their fees, especially for the less fortunate students or those coming from rural areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In recent years, there has been a significant increase in university
fees
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, which has made it difficult for less privileged
students
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 to get a good
education
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.
This
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 essay will extend my opinion on why higher
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 institutes must decrease their
tuition
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fees
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 or find other alternatives.
Firstly
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,
education
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 is the foundation
to create
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 a developed society. There is a direct correlation that the developed nations have a better quality of
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higher
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education
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.
Especially their
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 schools can create many doctors, scientists, and experts in numerous fields.
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, these experts assist their countries with great research, boosting the economy,
education
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, science, medicine, etc.
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, every nation needs a highly educated and productive workforce but the high
fees
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 at institutions prevent the opportunities for
education
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 from reaching all classes of people.
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,
students
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 are under great financial pressure, having
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less sufficient learning than they are possible. As we know, there are many
students
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 who work part-time to pay their
tuition
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fees
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 and buy books.
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, the governments are trying to reduce the disparities among social classes, enabling us to escape from the period when only the elite could study in
universities
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.
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, reducing
tuition
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fees
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 contributes to reaching equality for humanity.
On the other hand
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, some people state that reducing
fees
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 can resemble reducing the value of a university.
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,
education
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 providers, perhaps, are becoming less competitive than they used to and the quality of
universities
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 does not evolve intensively.
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,
universities
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 are not able to get a lot of revenue and
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 definitely has some adverse effect/influence on their operations
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 and economic development in general.
To sum up
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, the merits of reducing
fees
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 in
universities
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 outweigh keeping high
tuition
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fees
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.
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, the government should support eligible
students
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 with scholarships and implement less interest on educational loans.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • lower-income backgrounds
  • social equity
  • student debt
  • financial liabilities
  • workforce
  • regional disparities
  • higher education
  • quality of education
  • university resources
  • government subsidies
  • scholarships
  • across-the-board
  • affordable education
  • economic benefits
  • educated workforce
  • societal challenges
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