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A lot of money is spent on renovating old buildings. We should knock them down and build modern ones instead. To what extent to you agree or disagree with these statements

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Replacing a structure is a process that requires careful analysis. In architecture, constructions often carry historic or artistic value,
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 in which demolition is off-limits. In other
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 the costs of restoration are lower than those of reconstruction.
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 the earlier alternative is preferable. In certain locations, buildings are part of the character of the place.
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, Paris would not be the same without its Art-Deco palaces and Avant-Gurd houses. In
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 case, getting rid of all the vintage structures and knocking them down to make space for brand-new modern structures is unthinkable and would ruin the aesthetics of the French capital. In some
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, when the economic aspect is key, constructing from zero is way more expensive than re-adapting certain facilities.
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 procedure can be seen in Brooklyn, NY where several factories have been transformed into apartments, giving a new life to several squares on a budget. That said, in some
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 it is indeed cheaper to get rid of old structures and build new ones since the costs of renovating would exceed those of building from scratch -
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 when constant costly interventions are required, or when the
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 condition of the facility is terrible and nothing is worth saving.
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 I believe that there is no general rule that can be followed and that each case requires a precise analysis, in order to take the best decision both regarding the cultural value and the economic one.
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