In many countries, paying for thing using mobile phone(cellphone) apps is becoming increasingly common. Does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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that technology has

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rampantly.

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, in many countries, people are buying and paying bills using

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applications.

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kind of development has more merits than demerits. I will discuss both views in

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and foremost benefit is that paying utilities

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Internet

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is very easy and convenient.

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, there are many apps, in India

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all utility service in

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application, in which, people can pay

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electricity, phone,

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, etc.

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method for payment, for a businessman or working persons. As, they do not need to stand in

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to pay a bill, and without

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the place pay the bills online. Another reason is shopping becoming

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. Some mobile applications have their own virtual mall, where purchase

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stuff without

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limit of the store.

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, there are varieties of items available for

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sale.

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varieties, people can see the reviews of the things are selling on the website.

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feature has some disadvantages like cyber

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. Many websites and applications do not have enough security

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, users can

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attacked and robbed by hackers.

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, many clients

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not have much information about login credentials and security. They sometimes fill

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such

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details in front of strangers, which is risked

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the credentials. All in all,

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, paying and purchasing online has some risks of security it makes

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convenience

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