Some people believe that students should begin learning a language very early in schoop while others think these subjects should be taught later

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Some
people
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argue that it is important to learn foreign
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from young
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at school
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others think
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of subjects are hard to
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understand
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essay, I will look at both sides of the argument and give my own opinion.
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,
people
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believe that it is not early
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learning
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from junior classes. The primary reason is that statistics showed that
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will be more active and stickybeak at
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age
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. Their memory
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helps them learn language skills easily.
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there is a fact that
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the
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of
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4 and 17 are
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to have strong memory than older ones.
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reason, in the US the percentage of
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who attend mental activities is higher compared to that of adults.
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, in my opinion, it seems like forcing
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to learn
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from a younger
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is a wrong idea. It is true that
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parents always care about not only their
children
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's learning
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process
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their health
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and physical statement. It means that for some
children
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learning
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will be stressful.
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forcing, they will lose their interest
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school and studying.
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, we should pay attention to
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statements of our
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. In conclusion,
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some
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have reasons to believe that
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should study
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from an early
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, my own view is that we should not let school
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teach foreign
languages
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from
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age
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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