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Some people believe that students should begin learning a language very early in schoop while others think these subjects should be taught later

#people #students #language #schoop #subjects
Some
people
 argue that it is important to learn foreign
languages
 from young
age
 at school
while
 others think
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these kinds
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 of subjects are hard to
uderstand
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understand
 and study for them. In
this
 essay, I will look at both sides of the argument and give my own opinion.
On the other hand
,
people
 believe that it is not early
to begin
 learning
languages
 from junior classes. The primary reason is that statistics showed that
children
 will be more active and stickybeak at
this
age
. Their memory
also
 helps them learn language skills easily.
Furthermore
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 there is a fact that
people
at
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between
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 the
age
 of
between
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4 and 17 are
likely
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more likely
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 to have strong memory than older ones.
For
this
 reason, in the US the percentage of
children
 who attend mental activities is higher compared to that of adults.
On the contrary
, in my opinion, it seems like forcing
children
 to learn
languages
 from a younger
age
 is a wrong idea. It is true that
,
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 parents always care about not only their
children
's learning
procces
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process
 but
also
health
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 and physical statement. It means that for some
children
 learning
languages
 will be stressful.
Due to
 forcing, they will lose their interest
to
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 school and studying.
Therefore
, we should pay attention to
mental
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the mental
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 statements of our
children
. In conclusion,
while
 some
people
 have reasons to believe that
children
 should study
languages
 from an early
age
, my own view is that we should not let school
to
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teach foreign
languages
 from
this
age
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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