Many people try to create a balance between their professional life and their personal life. However, very few are able to achieve such a balance. What problems stop people from achieving a work-life balance? How can these problems be overcome?

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Prediction or recommendation

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In conclusion
To conclude
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Finally
In a nutshell
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2Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Grammar mistakes
 

1 paragraphs

76 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

work-life balance
increasing workload
technological overload
constant connectivity
time management skills
workplace culture
demanding culture
family responsibilities
chronic stress
lack of sleep
employer support
flexible working hours
remote work options
disconnect from work
efficient use of time
personal commitments

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Many people try to create a balance between their professional life and their personal life. However, very few are able to achieve such a balance. What problems stop people from achieving a work-life balance? How can these problems be overcome?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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6. International tourism has led to an huge increase in the number of visitors to many historical sites around the world. To what extent is this a positive or negative phenomenon?

School should use films, computers and games intead of books. Do you agree or disagree?

Write a letter to your English-speaking friend whom you visited recently. In your letter - Tell him/her how wonderful the experience you had in his country was - Invite him to visit your country - Tell him what you can do for him during his visit.

You recently bought an electronic device for your home. Your friend wants to buy the same device and has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter describe the device please explain why you bought it say whether or not your friend should buy it and why.