Children are facing more pressures nowodays from academic, social and commercial persectives. What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce these pressures?
Today
it is common that children
are facing difficulty
from academic, social and commercial challenges. Fix the agreement mistake
difficulties
This
essay intends to discuss these pressures and suggest
some measures to solve the Change the verb form
suggests
problems
. In my opinion, children
have to rest from these issues.
Today
there are many academic problems
in
youths. Change preposition
among
Today
’s children
are not competing with their peers
. Parents
want their children
to succeed in academic studies. They send their children
to the best schools. At those school's
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schools
children
can not stand more and more pressuares
. Correct your spelling
pressures
pressure
Also
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,
school
after school
hours. As a result
,children
don’t have time for fun, travelling with their friends and enjoying from
their childhood.
There are Change preposition
apply
also
many social and commercial problems
. Socially, today
's children
are in a huge dilemma. Their parents
make them more
and more Change preposition
under more
pressures
. They always say to their Fix the agreement mistake
pressure
children
that, they all have to pass their exams successfully and bring them honour. Because of that children
start to study hard. But when they fail their exams , they become stressful than ever before. Then
they also
face peer pressure which can be good if their peers
are good. Furthermore
, they see the latest models of cell phones or the latest fashion dresses in their peers
. So then
they want to buy it too, like their peers
. Of course, if they can not buy them, they get a
stressful situation.
The solution is not easy. Change preposition
into a
Children
should be cared for by their parents
at home and by teachers at school
. Parents
have to give their attention to their children
and have to understand them. Of course, today
parents
became workholic
but they have to find time for their Correct your spelling
workaholic
workaholics
children
and hear their problems
. At school
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,
for
their students because Change the preposition
with
about
of
today
common bullying and browbeat among teenagers. As well as
theseteachers
don’t have to give a lot of tasks because it Correct your spelling
these teachers
the teachers
restrict
child’s freedom.
In conclusionChange the verb form
restricts
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,
the
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apply
children
are having more pressures and stressful cases. Bad steps should be taken and parents
have to control that constantly. Otherwise
, these small issues can lead big
troubles in the future.Change preposition
to big
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