The charts below show the number of people in Europe who were affected by four types of noise by day and by night in cities and rural areas in 2007.

The charts below show the number of people in Europe who were affected by four types of noise by day and by night in cities and rural areas in 2007.
The
bie
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pie
charts give information about the
quantity
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number
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of
people
affected by
different
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type
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types
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of
noise
in Europe by
day
and by
night
in both urban and rural areas in 2007. The data is measured in millions for
traffic
,
train
,
aircraft
and
industry
.
Overall
,
it is clear that
there
were
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a
drammatic
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dramatic
increase
of
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traffic
noise
both
at
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day
and
night
,
while
people
were not affected by
train
,
aircraft
and
industry
a lot in cities. The number of
people
affected by
traffic
noise
in rural areas uptook considerably by
night
and by
day
,
while
there was not any
noise
by
industry
. Looking at the details, well over 50 and 60 million
people
affected
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by
traffic
by
day
and by
night
respectively, which
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the highest number in the group.
However
, the
noise
of
train
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trains
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decreased sharply to 10 by
day
and 8 by
night
correspondingly. The index of
aircraft
and
industry
noise
possesed
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possessed
lowest
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position in the group with 4 (
day
), 1 (
night
) and 1(
day
), 0.25(
night
)
accordingly
in 2007. The number of
people
who were affected by
noise
in rural areas made up 34 by
day
,
while
it declined by 10 by
night
. There were a
noticable
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noticeable
decline
of
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train
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to 8 and 6,
aircraft
to 2 and 1 by
day
and
night
accordingly
,
while
people
did not affect by
industry
in
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the countrysides
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countrysides
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countryside
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of Europe in 2007.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, noise, day, night, traffic, train, aircraft, industry with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.

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