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People have to spend more and more time to travel from their homes for jobs and study. What are the reason? How can we solve this problem?

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It is undoubtedly that more time
are
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 being definitely spent
for
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the
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personal and social activities
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 as study and work by
people
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.
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aim
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 to solve the problems behind
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 situation and
olso
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also
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this problems
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.
Most
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 obvious reason is that roads are very congested.
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Additionally
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 number of the vehicles
are
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 increasing.
Becouse Nowadays
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Because nowadays
 virtually all of the
people
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 of today have private transport. Because
of
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the
private
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number of private
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 cars are increasing, Public transport
do
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 their own work overdue.
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organize
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the
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most of the traffics. Especially on time that everyone
travel
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travels
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 to
the
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study and jobs
is
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 chock-a-block with tailback. And
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very
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 bad case. The solutions are not easy. But everyone
need
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 to join it. And they want to find
about
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this
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these
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 problems.
one
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 of the
solution
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solutions
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 is that if the government organize the park and
ride
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,
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less
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.
Becouse
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Because
people
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 drive their private cars to
the
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 destination and continue the rest of the way on foot or by public transport.
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 the problem would
partially
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 solved.
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hand
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people
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 should be motivated to do carpooling by having high occupancy vehicle lanes, only those cars, which are fully occupied, are allowed to move on
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 lanes, because of which the traffic on these lanes moves faster.
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 a system is being used very successfully in many parts of
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USA.
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, it is undeniable that commuting time has increased, but many steps can be taken to ameliorate the situation
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