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Some people think that developed countries have a higher responsibility to combat climate change than developing countries. Others believe that all countries should have the same responsibilities towards protecting the environment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Climate
change
 is the talk of every conversation, we are rapidly moving forward
while
 destroying the environment around us. Some people think that
the
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developed
countries
 should have a higher responsibility than the underdeveloped country when combating
climate
change
, so in
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 I will be discussing both points of view. There's no doubt that developed
countries
 have better and
advanced
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 technology at their disposal, they
also
 have more
and
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skilled manpower. Maybe
this
 is the reason why many people think that these nations must contribute more than the other
countries
. More money and
ability
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 to spread more awareness aren’t the only way you can fight
climate
change
. It is true that these features are very important when you combat
climate
change
 but there are many other ways that other
countries
 can help in
this
 initiative. The reasons that underdeveloped
countries
 give are that they are very poor and have extremely limited resources with them, but I think that these reasons should not be given as an excuse. They can help in numerous numbers of ways, any help towards
this
change
 is a big step forward. It doesn’t matter what you contribute, any amount of help can be very valuable.
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 everyone shares
this
 planet, the environment doesn’t differentiate between developed and underdeveloped
countries
, when a catastrophe strikes it hurts everyone and not just the developed
countries
. So,
to conclude
 with I think everyone has a responsibility towards
this
change
 and not just the developed
countries
. Every citizen of planet
earth
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Earth
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 should become one and fight
this
change
. If not fought soon
then
 it can cause
a
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havoc and destroy
this
 beautiful planet which almost 8 billion people reside in.
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