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Some people believe that bicycles are the best mode of transport in the cities while others disagree. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of both views and give your opinion.

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The discussion regarding the environment and alternative forms of transport
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has been increasing over the years.
Therefore
, there are individuals who think that in cities, commuting with bicycles is the best option.
On the other hand
, there are those who believe
otherwise
. Using bicycles to commute is an excellent alternative
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 because it is environmentally friendly.
For example
, in the Netherlands, one of the countries with the highest
number
 of cycle paths and users of
this
 means of transport, pollution rates are low and air quality rates have excellent parameters.
In addition
 to environmental issues, transforming the bicycle into the main way of transport brings significant benefits to physical health, contributing to the improvement of cardiovascular capacity, physical endurance and,
consequently
, loss of excess weight.
On the other hand
, a disadvantage of
this
 modality is the vulnerability to accidents, since the driver is without the protection of the structure of a car.
For example
,
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 indicates that there has been an increase in the
number
 of fatal accidents involving cyclists.
Furthermore
, there is a need to carry out structural changes in cities and
this
 often takes a long time. For one, increasing the
number
 of bike lanes and adding signposts to keep everyone safe. Ultimately, as there are clear upsides and setbacks, even though it requires some major structural changes for security, I believe that bike lanes are an excellent alternative and bring benefits in many ways,
such
 as improvements to the environment, people's health and traffic, contributing to building a healthier future. Governments should invest time, planning and financial resources to improve the quality of the existing ones and increase their
number
.
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Provide more specific examples to support your points and make the ideas more relevant to the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Zero Emissions
  • Cardiovascular Exercise
  • Cost-Effective
  • Traffic Congestion
  • Green Environment
  • Vulnerable to Accidents
  • Insufficient Bike Lanes
  • Weather Conditions
  • Urban Areas
  • Practicality
  • Infrastructure
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