Children are facing more pressures nowadays from academic, social and commercial perspectives

Today
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to discuss the point of these problem and
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recommend several
measures to ease the problem . I believe that
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teenagers
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rapidly growing problems. There are many academic
pressures
on
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teenagers
. Today 2
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with the
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of global villages. there are
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their
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excellent
in every
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also
there are
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their
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teenagers
to the best
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where the school bag is often
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heavier
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. There are
also
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huge dilemma. they want to
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except
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therefore
their
parents
force them to limit to the traditions so that the
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teenagers
face peer
pressures
.The solutions are not simple.
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with sign care . There are
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to dawn to earth expectations from
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of
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competition
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valued
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.
Children
have to be taught to win with knowledge and lose with grace.The summarise,There is no dubiousness that the
children
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so many
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, but steps must be taken on a war footing to keep
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in
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clear childhood.
Otherwise
, these
pressures
will stifle the physical and psychological growth of
children
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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