Some people believe that history subject is more important, while some believe that science and technology is more important, discuss both view and give your opinion

Some people support the topics like science and technology
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of thinkers support ancient history as
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important subject. There are split opinions about it. And before I give my opinion both the statements are discussed in
further
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paragraphs
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Now a days
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, technological advancement has increased and not only in
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science has shown progress in the medical field as well.
This
advancement makes our lives easy , everything is automated in
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world. Before we used to write letters , now our closed
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are just
one
message and
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phoebe call away. Many years ago there was a rapid increase in
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polio cases
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, medical science found
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that.
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because
of
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and other technologies we can see
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how the surface of
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is and
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Way looks like. To support the
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satetement
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statement
, the most important argument is that history teaches how to value our traditions and culture.
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, it gives us knowledge about the struggles of our freedom
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and how the constitution was developed.
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, in those days people were more physically fit ,
this
makes us understand that even with minimal luxury we can be fit healthy and enjoy our lives.
Thus
,
to conclude
and give my opinion. I believe that both are equally important in
todays
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world. As
one
reached about the past and other
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us walking hand in hand with the nation.
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