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.Nowadays ,cities are becoming more crowded what are problems and its solutions

#cities
In
this
 day and out,people from rural
areas
 have been migrating to
cities
 to access
facilities
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the facilities
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 of urban
areas
.
As a
result
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,result
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cities
 are becoming overcrowded and polluted .
This
 essay shall be explained in the upcoming paragraph.
To begin
 with ,most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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people prolongate in other developed
cities
for
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to
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 acquire all
aminites
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amenities
that
is
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are
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 crucial for spend a
batter
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better
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 life
such
 as
,
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apply
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health care ,
good
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and good
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 educational
insitute
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institute
.so they
migare
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migrate
 into rural
areas
 that
causes
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cause
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 difficulties in
cities
such
 as pollution.when more humans live in a place
then
 they used products that are
non renewable
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non-renewable
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it leads to pollutants the environment and land .
Secondly
,the level to spread
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of
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contiguous diseases became
increase
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increased
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.
For instance
 ,
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the pdemic
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pdemic
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pandemic
 in 2019
origins
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originated
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 from China
that
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which
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 is
more
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a more
the more
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 crowded country after
the
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India.
Thus
 ,overcrowded can
be
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apply
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cause many problems in the
cities
 that
leads
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lead
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 to chronic and acute disease. On the flipside,there are numerous
solution
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solutions
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 by which we can control a number of population in
a developing
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developing cities
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cities
.
Firstly
, improvement of basic
facilities
 in the underdeveloped
cities
such
 as hospitals and
insitute
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institute
 for their
economy
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economic
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 needs.
Secondly
,most of
masses
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the masses
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 migrate to
to
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apply
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high salary rates in rural
areas
 so pay
wage
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wages
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 should be equal for both
areas
 .
Thus
 if
facilities
 are
equall
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equally
equal
than
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then
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 people
doesn't
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don't
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 migrate to
another
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another area
other areas
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areas
. To recapitulate,
due to
 migration from rural to urban
areas
cities
 are becoming more crowded and it can cause many problems
such
 as pollution and diseases.if governments provide all
facilities
 in
hoth
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the
 area
then
tha
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the
 balance should
be maintain
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be maintained
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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