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People nowadays tend to have children at older ages Do the advantages of this outweighs the disadvantages?

#people #children #ages
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In recent Times, it is a common trend among
people
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 to give
birth
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 to their offspring when they are old, the demerit surpasses the merit because
people
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 will have enough time to groom themselves in order to nurture and grow with their
kids
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,in ,addition they might have made enough money to raise their
children
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, though growing old has its own demerit because giving
birth
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 at that
age
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 might cause health complications which
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 could be managed with a lot of care. My points will be explained
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 in the forthcoming paragraphs. Parenthood comes with a lot of responsibility which one has to be fit mentally to bring forth to
children
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 and manage them
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, growing old before giving
birth
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 will enable the couple to be mature enough both psychologically and emotionally in order to nurture and cater for their
kids
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,
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 having enough time for their
children
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 thereby able to meet their needs.
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, Young
age
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 gives room for youngsters to hustle and make money in order to get ready for the task ahead of raising
kids
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, bringing forth babies at older
age
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 will be easy and it will allow
people
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 to be able to afford the needs of their
children
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 if they had concentrate on making money
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 of bringing forth
children
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.
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, some young
people
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 cannot bear the expenses of reproduction thereby making them irresponsible to their
kids
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, working hard
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 of focusing on raising babies will prevent the shame that comes with not being able to cater for needs.
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, giving
birth
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 at a younger
age
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 will enable
people
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 to grow with their
kids
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 and have enough energy to bring them up,
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 it helps to reduce the complications that accompany elderly procreation.
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, a reduction in reproductive hormones leads to infertility,
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 complications in pregnancy.,
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 , if there is enough time to focus on careers
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 achieving goals at a younger
age
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instead
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 of giving
birth
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, it gives room to be matured both emotionally and financially thereby leading to raising better
children
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • delayed parenting
  • maternal/paternal age
  • biological clock
  • career establishment
  • financial stability
  • physical stamina
  • emotional maturity
  • health risks
  • generation gap
  • work-life balance
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