People nowadays tends to have children at older age .Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

In recent
time
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times
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,people are likely
give
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birth to offspring at
later
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a later
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age
,having
children
at
older
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an older
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age
might cause health
problem
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problems
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and some
complication
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complications
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for the
mother
and the
child
,unlike having
children
at
early
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stage when you will
hav
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have
good health to take care of the baby ,on
this
I think demerit outweigh the merit.
Although
,older
age
have the tendency of having
children
with congenital abnormality and the
mother
tend to have a complication
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eclampsia
and
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if the
mother
is not properly monitored the
mother
and the
child
may die and with
these
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the
mother
may be prone to
ceasarian
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caesarian
cesarian
section.
On the other
hand
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I think having
children
at
early
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stage reduce maternal death because young adult can be easily treated
unlike
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older people that will need proper attention. In
conclusion
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I
thing
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think
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demerit
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the demerit
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outweigh the merit in the sense that
to have
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having
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a healthy
child
is far more better to give birth at older
age
when the
child
may cause
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a treat
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treat
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threat
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to the parent.
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  • Trend
  • Delaying parenthood
  • Biological clock
  • Financial stability
  • Emotional maturity
  • Health risks
  • Opportunity cost
  • Weighing the pros and cons
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