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People nowadays tends to have children at older age .Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

#people #children #age
In recent
time
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times
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,people are likely
give
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 birth to offspring at
later
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a later
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age
 ,having
children
 at
older
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an older
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age
 might cause health
problem
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problems
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 and some
complication
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complications
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 for the
mother
 and the
child
,unlike having
children
 at
early
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an early
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 stage when you will
hav
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have
 good health to take care of the baby ,on
this
 I think demerit outweigh the merit.
Although
,older
age
 have the tendency of having
children
 with congenital abnormality and the
mother
 tend to have a complication
call
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 eclampsia
and
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if the
mother
 is not properly monitored the
mother
 and the
child
 may die and with
these
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 the
mother
 may be prone to
ceasarian
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caesarian
cesarian
 section.
On the other
hand
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 I think having
children
 at
early
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an early
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 stage reduce maternal death because young adult can be easily treated
unlike
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 older people that will need proper attention. In
conclusion
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 I
thing
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think
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demerit
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the demerit
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 outweigh the merit in the sense that
to have
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having
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 a healthy
child
 is far more better to give birth at older
age
 when the
child
 may cause
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a treat
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treat
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threat
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 to the parent.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trend
  • Delaying parenthood
  • Biological clock
  • Financial stability
  • Emotional maturity
  • Health risks
  • Opportunity cost
  • Weighing the pros and cons
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