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People nowsday tend to have children in older age. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

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In recent times,most individuals desire to have youngsters in their golden years. There are certain fact that could lead to
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 situation, which includes financial constraint in taking care of a family
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 the other factors are the inability to woo a lady and psychological preparedness. From my observation , the demerit outweighs the merit .And
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, marriage is an institution between a man and
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 in order to have a baby.the issue of financial instability has led many to delayed marriage ,most especially when the economics is not favourable in terms of providing job
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 for the people is already a stumbling block to
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, difficulty to express oneself to a lady and being emotionally set for,
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 partnership are factors that are majorly the circumstances which lead to delay in having children. I once had a cousin that's
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 both have a dialogue , he gave me certain requirements about why is yet to settle down and prepare for kids,his response was
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, unemployment that the recession in the country is not friendly at all and he does not want any unborn neonate to suffer mercilessly without ensuring both physiological , safety and love and belonging needs are met ,
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 Abraham Maslow theory. In conclusion, having young ones at a tender age is prudence because you are able to groom and nurture them , thereby bringing them in the fear of the Lord and ascribing good morals ,escaping andropause and menopause which is a health-related disease. But the finance and wellbeing of the child should be the utmost priority to be considered.
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