People nowadays tend to have children at older ages. Do the advantages of this outweigh the diaadvantages?

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In recent times, decisions are taken by some individuals to bear
children
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at maturity. I strongly believe that the demerits outweigh the merits as these can lead to terrible health conditions for the woman around labour
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stigmatization in our society. These will be
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, having offspring in old age can lead to health complications during birth. As life progresses the human body depreciates, thereby causing loss of function or reductions in the activities of the body.
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having
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by an aged individual can make the woman come down with severe complications like eclampsia, uterine rupture, fibroid and bleeding during and after partum which can eventually lead to death. All these can be averted if decisions are taken to give birth early.
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, about a decade ago, a woman of 44 years had her first pregnancy and
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to bed after several months but unfortunately came down with a complication after delivery.
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, the society we live in and relatives expect more from a newly married coupllatteey can be tagged as barren
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the delay in bearing
offsprings
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.
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, conceiving when
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comes with its own merit.
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creates enough time to plan for the future especially financially. Couples have sufficient periods to plan for their upcoming wards. Plenty of ideas and ample knowledge are gathered to apply after having
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children
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, adequate income is acquired for the family as well. In conclusion , the decision to wait till old age before bearing
children
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is of great disadvantage compared to the advantages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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